Sunday, 15 April 2012

The Kid Capturer

Long long ago there lived a little family. In this family there was Sophie, Chris and her mum . Sophie had nice shiny blond hair as shiny as a sunflower. She could sing as beautiful as Christina Aguilera. There was one bad man called Jack. He was as mean as a cheetah and a tiger mixed together. He takes kids away quickly like a speeding car.   

On Friday Sophie was walking home from school then all of a sudden Jack bumped into her   and Sophie said ,” Watch where you're going,” Jack turned in anger and said,”Nobody talks   to me like that young lady!. He chased after her. Sophie was horribly terrified and she ran for her life. She stopped at her house. Sophie’s mother looked out the window and saw that her  daughter was being hit and was horribly hurt . Her mother went outside straight away and   tried to help poor Sophie. Sophie was in pain she had to go to the doctors straight away.      

Chris called the police and Jack was never seen again .From that day on, Chris would pick Sophie up from school. Jack was never seen again by Sophie. A few years later Sophie read in the paper that Jack had been caught stealing a car. He was sent to prison and stayed there for the rest of his life.

1 comment:

Ms Aireen said...

A very interesting narrative story Shantai! You are developing your ideas well by using interesting, descriptive language. Keep doing this and you will achieve your writing goals throughout the year.

Ms Aireen

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